Friday, May 25, 2012

Deleted Scene From SHE BELONGS TO ME



She Belongs to Me is a romantic-suspense through and through. The first scene literally starts with a bang, and from there, I take you through the lives of two people destined to be together, but life has a way of confusing the real issues and leading us down a scary path.
I’m not giving away any secrets, because you know from the synopsis that my female protagonist ends up in the hospital in a coma; the question is why—or who?

I’m just going to take you behind the scenes to a neglected scene. I say neglected, because I wanted to show this, but knew I didn’t have the room, so I purposely left it out.

From the first chapter: Jordan is in the hospital waiting room, waiting on word of whether his wife is dead or alive.

Jordan’s gaze wandered to the locked emergency room doors for the hundredth time in in the last hour. As much as he wanted to call his family for support, he needed to wait. He needed information; he couldn’t just tell them she’d been shot and may not live. But mostly, he knew that homicide would be here any minute.
When his eyes weren’t on the ER doors, they were on the sliders leading to the parking lot. The detectives would be here soon, and not only them, but Internal Affairs too. It didn’t matter that he was an officer—his head dropped as he felt the tears well up again. Why would she do it? He just couldn’t believe that Jaynee would have shot herself, but the evidence was clear. It was her gun, and based on where the gun was laying, it was clear she’d been holding it.
He shook his head. He’d given her the gun for protection. He never thought—
“Hey, Jordan,” a soft voice broke him from his lamenting. Jordan looked up to see Len Powe. Powe nodded his head toward the cafeteria. “Let’s go somewhere private.”
Jordan followed Len down the hall toward the cafeteria, but stopped when he felt a hand on his shoulder. “Hey, man.” Detective Nelson Williams stepped alongside of him. “I’m so sorry about Jaynee. Have you heard anything?”
Jordan shook his head as he struggled to retain the tears. These were his coworkers. He couldn’t cry in front of them. Len opened the door to a side room off the cafeteria officers used when they had to question a suspect. The room was for hospital meetings, but Jordan had used it more than once to interrogate or inform a relative of their loved one’s status. Now he was the one they’d interrogate. He sat down with his back to the corner, so he could see through the glassed-in wall if a member of the hospital staff had news.
Powe took the seat across from him. Williams pulled out the chair at the far end, out of direct eye contact. Powe was leading this one, then. “You know I have to read you your rights, Jordan.” Jordan nodded and let his friend read off the Miranda rights he’d cited so many times in the past. “So, why don’t you start at the beginning?” 
Jordan pulled in a deep breath and spilled out the entire story of how he’d woken up to the sound of a gunshot. Both detectives listened without interruption as he described the scene.
Len leaned back in his seat when Jordan finished his spiel. “We have a forensics team at your house now, so we’ll be looking for any foreign particles. We’re on your side; you know that, right?”
Jordan nodded his head, but then darted his eyes between Nelson and Powe. “Wait a minute. You don’t think—”
Powe shook his head “No, Jordan, of course not. We know how much you loved Jaynee, but there will be an investigation. There has to be; you know that.”

If you would like to read more, you can download She Belongs to Me at Amazon or Barnes & Noble. Instead of giving one reader a free book, I talked the publisher into discounting She Belongs to Me to .99 cents for everyone, to celebrate the release of my new romantic-suspense, Land of the Noonday Sun, which publishes this week.

Books from Carmen DeSousa:

After secrets and a mysterious background leave a wife’s life hanging by a thread, a husband must look for answers in the only place he knows—the past. She Belongs to Me
When two strangers have nothing left but their dreams, they must forge a relationship in Nantahala, North Carolina, a small town known as Land of the Noonday Sun. Land of the Noonday Sun

10 comments:

  1. Thank you for having me again, Maureen. I hope you and your readers enjoyed my deleted scene from SHE BELONGS TO ME. It is always fun to visit with old characters, as they seem to feel like family after you've worked with them for so long.

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  2. CARMEN
    THIS SOUNDS LIKE A GREAT READ KEEP UP THE TERRIFIC WRITING
    TAMMYJACKSON

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    1. Thank you, Tammy. I hope if you have time for a new read, you will check She Belongs to Me out, The publisher discounted it to .99 cents through the end of May to celebrate my new release.
      Happy reading!
      Carmen

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  3. Such a great book this was! I love reading the deleted scenes from it too - sort of like those extras on DVD's for movies. I plan to go back and reread this story soon. I liked the deleted scene you revealed earlier with Jaynee's email. Can't wait for your other books, Carmen!

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    1. Thank you, Amy, and your book is in the mail as you were part of my giveaway last month. I hope you enjoy Land of the Noonday Sun too. I put a surprise in there for my previous readers. :)
      My best,
      Carmen

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  4. Thank you for the deleted scene. I enjoyed it so much I just purchased She Belongs To Me for my Nook. Will Land Of The Noonday Sun be available for the Nook?

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    1. Thank you, Mary. Yes, the publisher trys to work out any formatting bugs at one site before going to the next, but it will be available very soon.
      Thank you for commenting.
      Happy reading!

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    2. Thank you again, Mary, and I did want to let you know that LAND OF THE NOONDAY SUN is now available on Nook. I hope you are enjoying SHE BELONGS TO ME.
      Happy reading!

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  5. Hi Carmen,

    I am reading "She Belongs to Me" & thoroughly enjoying it. I have just suffered a death in the family so it will take me awhile to get to the review.
    I can see that you had a lot of fun writing it!
    Jan

    janet_kerr@msn.com

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    1. Thank you for commenting, Janet, and sorry to hear about your loss. I definitely appreciate reviews, so thank you.
      Happy reading!

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